Chinese 用平板压片法，先用吸管吸取1滴精液于试管中，再用0．9％的生理盐水进行1：20稀释，取1滴稀释后的精液置于载玻片上，盖上盖玻片，在400倍的显微镜下观察精子的运动情况，记录直线前进运动的精子数所占的比例。用10级评分法进行精液活率评分。

Wrong The method of plain projection was used. Firstly absorb one drop of semen was absorbed with pipette into the test tube and use 0.9% normal saline tothen diluted it using 0.9% normal saline with the proportion of 1:20. Put oOne drop of dilute semen was taken onto the microscope slide and covered it with the cover glass. Then observe the movements of sperms could be observed by 400-fold microscope., record tThe proportion of the number of sperms going forward in straight line was recorded., Aand measure the sperm viability was measured with the 10-degree scoring.

Right The method of plain projection was used. Firstly one drop of semen was absorbed with pipette into the test tube and then diluted using 0.9% normal saline with the proportion of 1:20. One drop of dilute semen was taken onto the microscope slide and covered with the cover glass. Then the movements of sperms could be observed by 400-fold microscope. The proportion of the number of sperms going forward in straight line was recorded. And the sperm viability was measured with the 10-degree scoring.

注：整个实验过程描述需要用被动句表达

通过对比可以发现，用被动形式表达同样的实验过程更具有表达性。成熟资深翻译的译文和初级翻译的译文在此区别很明显。希望译员可以好好体会学术翻译的这一原则：用完整句清晰的表达，避免模糊和语言碎片。

来源：语际翻译公司

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